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Rain Falls Divided Love Flows by ~DrowningByWords:iconDrowningByWords:



Red, yellow, pale or dark
Rainbows die to fast.

He could be a ghost within her.

I just can't relate,
Lost all interest
I've lost myself,
Far away from pain
Rainbow lullabies.

How much do you love me?

Left to see past eternity, he didn't call again
Insect lullabies sex a chore,
She cries, as if he were I.

When he hid from the sun, he came closer to her heaven.

The ground sucks out her last tear,
In his sight she becomes a flower
He asks you to walk in his shoes.

He only wants to find a part in her world.

Scarred across his heart,
She only wishes that you feel that this life is a life.

Time is short,
Rainbows die to fast
Has he hid from the sun, he came closer to her heaven.
©2006-2009 ~DrowningByWords
:icondrowningbywords:

Author's Comments

Constructive criticism would be much appreaciated
cos this one as been troubling me all day
and countless rewrites
its my first for quite a while
is just looking at love from different angles.......
all my heart & soul,
Russ,
xoxo

edited: 27/07/07.
changed the title from The Price of Passion
to Rain Falls Divided Love Flows

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:iconcuisle-mo-croidhe:
This is how I would write that verse and that line, I like the words. And, I think you mean too in the rainbow lines. That is all. Hope it helps, :) Mena

Insect lullaby, sex a chore
She cries, as if he were I

When he hid from the sun, he came closer to her heaven

--
Hope - Bauhaus

Your mornings will be brighter
Break the line
Tear up rules
Make the most of a million times no
:icondrowningbywords:
aww thanks for the help much appreaciated and I agree with the changes.... :heart:
Russ
xoxo

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Music Is True Love:love:You have never been in love/Until you've seen the stars/Reflect in the reservoirs:love:Book Lovers Of The World Unite!
:iconcuisle-mo-croidhe:
you are welcome, doesnt da have ims, it would be so much easier... :)

--
Hope - Bauhaus

Your mornings will be brighter
Break the line
Tear up rules
Make the most of a million times no
:icondrowningbywords:
I don't think it does do you by any chance have msn?
Would be nice to be able to chat more often
Russ
xoxo

--
Music Is True Love:love:You have never been in love/Until you've seen the stars/Reflect in the reservoirs:love:Book Lovers Of The World Unite!
:iconcuisle-mo-croidhe:
no aol, i could create a chat room on here

--
Hope - Bauhaus

Your mornings will be brighter
Break the line
Tear up rules
Make the most of a million times no
:icondrowningbywords:
ok no probs send me the name or link of it when its set up =)
I have only got msn

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Music Is True Love:love:You have never been in love/Until you've seen the stars/Reflect in the reservoirs:love:Book Lovers Of The World Unite!
:iconcuisle-mo-croidhe:
CantSeePastEternity, dont know how to send a link

--
Hope - Bauhaus

Your mornings will be brighter
Break the line
Tear up rules
Make the most of a million times no
:iconclrkrex:
Well I think it's pretty cool. The only line that seemed out of place to me was

Ego's are tree hugging sponges

That's it, and I don't really know why. It just seems out of place to me, but that just may be me. I like it overall! :D :hug:

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:iconseastars:
i like it alot, though i agree that the "egos" line is a bit out of place
:icondrowningbywords:
thanks I finally found it =)

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Music Is True Love:love:You have never been in love/Until you've seen the stars/Reflect in the reservoirs:love:Book Lovers Of The World Unite!

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