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In the remaining twilight that is left,
The earth keeps spinning me away from you.
Seems I know just what to say
Too bring the rain clouds.
Seems I know just what to do
Too feel cold.
Long gone are the days,
When my pain could be kissed away.

This is a dream poem disorientated,
To shy;
Too sad,
Too slow;
Too sick,
Too stupid.
Too shy too pickup a girl,
Too sad too scream.
Too slow too run away,
Too sick too work
And too stupid too interpret silent roars.
This is a dream invaded by an army of nightmares,
It's much to much.

I'm in a state of chaos I can't describe
Thousands of hugs and kisses deep,
I'm in as deep as a divorce.
Deeper still than love and deaths
I'm in as deep as a fight,
Deeper still than a mass grave.
I'm in as deep as all of these wounds put together
And deeper still are my screams.
More and more I sink deeper,
Just like before my world was abused.
Gone are the days when a kiss or a hug could repair my little world,
Never been kissed once like it since.



(c)
Russell David Kearns
2006-05-21
"....I'm in a state of chaos I can't describe...."
This is a poem inspired by relationships, love, family, friendship, child abuse and dreams
It is about myself but can also be related to a lot of people
It is also inspired by my good friend Sophie :icongonejustlikebefore:
I'm not sure if I've written the 'to too's' part of the poem properly but saying that it doesn't matter wether it is right or not Cos I want the poem to feel like its being narrated by a lost child To somebody who is sad and still affected by their lost childhood.
All my Heart & Soul
xoxoxo
Russ


edited 9th of August 2007
mostly punctuation
and added a preview image
a collage by me that can be found here: [link]
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AngelofAngels666 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2007
It's beautiful
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2007  Professional Writer
aww thanx thats kind of you to say and hanx for the fave too =) :hug:
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AngelofAngels666 Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2007
anytime :) i like making people happy
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ClaudiaCasanova Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2007
:hug: Beautiful
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2007  Professional Writer
aww thanx =) :glomp: :hug:
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cryingpain Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2007
Oh good poem, I can relate to it. :) :hug:
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2007  Professional Writer
thanx that means a lot to me =) :cuddle:
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Kage-Ichihashi Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2007
You accomplished your goal in wanting to "to feel like its being narrated by a lost child To somebody who is sad and still affected by their lost childhood." You really did. Brilliant work.
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2007  Professional Writer
wow thanx thats means a lot to me cos this one means so much to me =) :hug:
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Psychedelic-joi Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2007
Damn, man, the more of your work I read, the more I'm convinced that one of your books should be on a shelf. This is awesome.
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2007  Professional Writer
aww! thanx its very encouraging and sweet of you to say
I showed what you said to my best friend who's been banging onto me for ages
to self publish, which is what i'm working on doing at the moment if you see my latest journal =)
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:heart: :rose:
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2007  Professional Writer
aww thanx thats nice of you to say =) :glomp: :hug:
this one means a lot to me so glad that you looked through my old ones and picked it out =)
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spam-man Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow! thats is so moving! i mean i wish i could write stuff taht moving and with that much meaning behind it i mean i have that kinda stuff in me but i can't get it out i really like it ! :hug:
:heart:
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2006  Professional Writer
thanks sweety for the sweet comment and for the fave
:cuddle:
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spam-man Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
hey no problem babe :hug: (idk how to do the emoticon that you did :P)
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Kisses-n-Tears Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2006   Photographer
I love this one...you did a wonderful job with capturing emotion. The first stanza was overall wonderful and the third used excellent imagery. I wasn't entirely sure about the repetition in the second though? Still...great job. :heart:
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for the super sweet and constructive comment =) :hug:
and thanks for the fave
thanks for taking the time to comment
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Kisses-n-Tears Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2006   Photographer
You're very welcome Russ.
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Error732 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006
I've got to say that, while I thoroughly enjoyed the opening stanza, I was a bit disappointed as it went on. The parallels of phrasing in the opening were well-assembled, well-finished, and overall just well-done. I was a bit thrown by the repetition in the second stanza, and I felt the third was a bit confused.

Still worth a second read, though. Most poets don't do half as well with such topics.
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for the praise and for the really constructive comment
am so pleased and glad to meet fellow poets and recieve constructive criticism
cos I love writing and and any help I get is very much appreaciated
:hug:
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Error732 Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2006
Sure thing!
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Luke-Mahn Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006   Writer
(i think) you're great at playing words! (teach me?)

so touching and deep! :)
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for your really sweet and encouraging comment :hug:
I wish I could teach but I wouldn't know where to begin or how or what to say
just keep writing, reading and living and dreaming a vibrant life and be inquisitive and open minded
is all I can suggest
keep your dreams
and please stay in touch :hug:
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thisisnotoneword Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006
I think maybe this stops abruptly. I was so drawn in and it flowed gently with a sweet sourness, and cut off.

Having said that, I really love the imagery, the feeling, the way I interpret it and the sadness of it all. The first stanza is my favourite. The second stanza, as you mentioned you didn't write the "to too's" part properly, but I think that fits with the line "This is a dream poem disorientated"

This is brilliantly done.
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for your really sweet, insigthful, constructive and understanding comment :hug:
am really grateful for any constructive criticisms I recieve
you seem to have a very understanding and knowledgable view of poetry and also you are a impressive writer too
thanks for your support and for taking the time to truly read my poems and for the constructiveness
:hug:
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thisisnotoneword Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006
You're more than welcome. :glomp:
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Belllum Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006   Photographer
"Iím in a state of chaos I canít describe
"

im feeling with u dude im over that time...:hug:

"Just like before my world was abused
Gone are the days when a kiss or a hug could repair my little world"

the hole poem really touched me and i feel kind of connected to you ...your soul whatever ...great to meet u anyway

and great poem
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for your really sweet and compassionate comment :hug:
I'm so flattered and surprised and really grateful that feel so strongly about my poem
and I'm so grateful too have come across you and your gallery :hug:
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Belllum Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006   Photographer
my opinion ...poetry is something personal somehow i mean everything u write has kind of to do with urself ur thaughts ur meanings everything u done before influences whatever haha u can find many things here (so lets stop here) anyway as i sayd before i feel connected to you ...i think we have some important things in common what we did in our lifes and what we think of things... im very glad to meet you ...and looking forward to get to know u better !!! :hug:

so u have gone threw some bad times hu :sad: ?
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aislyn26 Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Hobbyist
Sorrowful words but not bad at all.
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for your sweet and compassionate comment :hug:
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korenna Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006   Writer
"This is a dream poem disorientated"
I really like this line. Strong, bold, quite an impact.

This poem has a nice rhythm to it, adding a structure to these sentiments of conflict and hurt. Wonderful work.
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks for a really sweet and constructive and understanding comment
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Xerces Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
beautiful piece. very emotional and well written. the last few lines are heart stoppers. great work
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks so much =)
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thats deffinately one of the ones i'm most proud of
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Xerces Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2006  Professional Artisan Crafter
good. you should be :-)
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:hug: ^_^
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks :hug: :cuddle:
^__^
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:) hehe..no problem.
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DAhugbuddies Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2006
We the would love to feature your poem ^_^ hehe! very insperational!
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DAhugbuddies Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2006
:) it's featured :)
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2006  Professional Writer
aww thanks :hug: :cuddle: :hug:
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DAhugbuddies Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2006
done
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2006  Professional Writer
thank you =)
very much appreaciated :hug:
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no problem! :hug:
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gonejustlikebefore Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2006  Professional Artist
=( i cant stop reading this... -clings- xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
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DrowningByWords Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2006  Professional Writer
aww huggles and cuddles
I came across yur bfs profile while browsing yur favourites hope u don't mind?
I was struck by a pic of a dead cat
been imagining lots of dead cats coming after me and scratching the walls and doors trying to get in
funny enough I can hear a couple outside =D
like yur new layout and stuff on myspace
is much prettier and much better to browse and stuff
yur a really awesome friend and the main reason why I am on here so much
yur pics with yur new camera are gr8
xoxoxoxo
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gonejustlikebefore Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2006  Professional Artist
=) hehehe thank you, yeah that dead cat is fucking scary!! he showed it to me when we first started dating 9 months ago, and just scared the hell out of me!, good way to impress a girl eh? hah, i get cats scratching me all the time... evil little sods!
i like my myspace too, just something to ocupy my bordness... and yes, its VERY pink :D and has THE best song on it, ever....LORDI!!! hahaha
-cuddles- well i put alot of random crap up on here, and im just glad you like it
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